Personification Piece

So this was one of my options for my personification piece.  The first two stanzas (first especially) - I am decently happy with what I managed to get them to, though they still need work (always).  The third stanza - What do you think? Continue? End it there? Can you give me opinions?  Also, the abstract concept of hope was supposed to be incorporated, but I think I prefer it without. Please give me opinions and possible revisions! Thanks guys!!

Love, Lust, and Passion

Love buttons his shirt,

Knowing nothing of the

Day, the

Night. The

Moments, the

Memories

To come.

Lust is in a light pink dress,

Flowing and innocent.

When she reveals herself,

Uncovers herself,

From the sheets that hide her,

You'll see

Red Lace.

You'll see her.

Her body.

Skin.

Passion is the moon.

the moon,

the stars,

That night.


EDIT:

Befriend my Heart

 

Love buttons his shirt,

Knowing nothing of the

Day, the

Night, the

Moments, the

Memories

To come.

Lust is in a light pink dress,

Flowing and innocent.

When she reveals herself,

Uncovers herself,

From the sheets that hide her,

You'll see

Red Lace.

You'll see her:

Her body,

Skin.

Passion holds the moon above their

souls.

Befriending

the sky,

the stars,

That night.